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What do you think?


I just wrote this, waht do you think?

We sing songs of hate, We sing songs of war, We sing songs of rape, & We sing songs of gore, But I sing a new rythym, Yeah I sing a new beat, One that blows your mind, one theat moves your feet, Its a smooth ass rhyme, Ina  smooth ass game, tThis poem I have written, Is a poem of my pain, Ive lived, Ive laughed, Ive loved,  Ive died, I stayed up all night, no more tears left to cry, you tore apart my life, with just a few words, you told me you loved, then told me you lied, Now I live alone, Afraid to go out, not trusting a soul, always living in doubt, I dont know what to do, I dont know what to say, So I sit alone at home every night, And I simply pray, for a quick end to this pain.



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x.x I just now found the poem you were talking about...now I understand...I read the wrong thing at first...

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I thought it was good untill the 'smooth ass' stuff. I thought the cussing in it didn't flow with the meaning of the whole poem, that and it seemed unnessacary and slightly....ghetto? But then again the poem sounds more like a rap song then anything.

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it was meant as a song poem ^^"""


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But what genera of song? Was what I mostly trying to understand.

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idk i jus wrote it as it came to mind o.o


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Ok

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vary nice ^^ i could feel the beat from the words and i could see what one could do with that, good job!

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